Talk:First Battle of Mons Dei

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First Battle of Mons Dei FAC Vote (6/0/2)

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Support

  1. A well written story that provides all the facts in a great read.HailandKill 04:20, 30 December 2005 (GMT)
  2. An excellent edition towards the entire collection. If all other articles concerning the war are written with the same dedication I have little doubt that the entire 'War of Golden Sucession' will be nominated. Sarcanza
  3. I'll give a self-vote for this article. Macabees 18:19, 5 January 2006 (GMT)
  4. Support Gruen2alk 14:23, 7 March 2006 (GMT)
  5. Opening section's still a bit muddy but the article provides information on many different levels and its complex analysis of a multilayered conflict provides the foundation for readers' enlightenment. An overall excellent piece of work. (( Pacitalkia )) Time sent: 05:10, 13 October 2006 (GMT)
  6. Follows Gruenberg's path with a big SUPPORT. Southeast Asia 05:41, 10 November 2006 (GMT + 8)

Oppose

Neutral

  1. Not a bad article, but I find that it is a little hard to understand, especially the lead section. I'd like a little more background on the war in this article before I support this. → Ceo \ squawk 04:28, 30 December 2005 (GMT)
  2. If the voice of one NSer who is browsing through to take a break from his own pagework counts, I think this page is fairly well done, but needs to be broken up a bit more clearly. Section divisions, particularly in the battles, to delineate by time, event, or topic (Strategy, Weigari Offense, or Dawn, Day 4, for example) and some maps of the battle lines as they formed, were broken through or driven back would help this article greatly. Minor reworkings of the prose, mainly for style and flow, might also help. Nairatsa 08:21, 7 January 2006 (GMT)

Comments/Questions

  • Understandable Ceo; I'll do my best to adress those concerns. Thanks also to Hailandkill; we were talking about the article and FAC issues, and I guess he decided to go for it! Macabees 04:58, 30 December 2005 (GMT)
  • The third vote for was a logged-in vote, but with no sign - perhaps an extra tilde was used. In any case, it has been changed. Gruen2alk 14:23, 7 March 2006 (GMT)
  • I like this: an interesting variation. One suggestion: remove the template at the bottom, for now. Whilst it's a good idea, it's full of red links, so it seems pretty useless, and a bit ugly. Put it back in when more articles in the series are done. Gruen2alk 14:23, 7 March 2006 (GMT)

Additional Commentary

This is a pretty well written article.

And I wish I hadn't ceased to exist so I could of participated... (Keyshona)


This was a good IC fight for me, and a damned good story if I say so myself. (Hailandkill)