Talk:Valaquine

There's a lot of cracked-out spacedy creatures in NS. I'm thinking this article needs less concentration on value estimation "strangest creatures," "normal," "strange" and needs to concentrate more on simple description... stuff like "it looks like a xenomorph but biologically similar to a mammal" -- that sort of thing.

Also, dropping 'more papal than the pope' may be a good idea. We're trying to write encyclopedia articles, which demand a little more professionalism. Still, good effort in all.

--165.134.186.198 01:08, 10 Oct 2004 (GMT)

I agree with the previous statement. Though most of what you have can probably be kept, you need to add much more information; given that this is a nonstandard (not humanesque) race, full life cycle, forms at various stages, neater prose, and more detail throuought.

For example, how many fingers does he have? Are they primarily amiable to humans? What atmospheres do they require? Is that tail prehensile? Genders? Intelligence? Weird Alien head-tongue? Also, sarcasm and humor needs the steady base of fact to thrive. "Noone ever accused them of originality" only comes off as a good joke if your page is otherwise informative and factual. Also, you may want to trim the blue background to white, to better fir with the Wiki's own.

(If this appears a bit vicious, I apologise. I believe quite a few of the race pages need editing, and I plan on seeing to it when I get the chance.)

Nairatsa 04:16, 7 January 2006 (GMT)